Year 4 Group Narratives

Camping with the Canoe
By Marcus, Sebastian & Keita

On an old dirt tracked road Mark & his dad Paul along with Ed and Phillip were on they’re way to a camp site. When they got there, they started to unpack every last bit of their luggage, Mark saw a sign saying CANOES FOR RENT! Phillip ran straight to the shack and asked “one four seated red canoe please”.

Phillip came back with an old, rusty red canoe, on his shoulder. “Shall we go canoeing now?” asked Mark “Okay” said Paul “HANG ON there are only three life jackets” exclaimed Ed “ that’s okay I shall not were one” Paul replied “Good I shall get ready lets see goggles, towel and lunch”. As soon as all of them got to the Everest Lake they set the canoe up and started rowing. After fifteen minutes Paul wanted some lunch so he stood up and he toppled over and landed in Everest Lake.

Soon enough the Everest leeches came and they broke the canoe in half with their six rows of sharp teeth. Right after the leeched broke the canoe Ed, Phillip and Mark all fell in “Oh No the Everest leeches are going to eat us alive” exclaimed Ed “Not if I can help it ARGH!” Phillip shouted as an Everest leech bit him on the back. “ARGH, ARGH” screamed Ed and Paul.

Mark saw what was happening to his friends and dad he jumped aboard half of the canoe and attached the other half of the canoe with his towel. With the fixed canoe Mark fetched Paul, Ed and Phillip then slowly rowed back to shore. Once on dry land Ed & Phillip regained conscious although Paul was still unconscious. “Oh no dad is still unconscious” Mark exclaimed. “Well I guess we need to try and resuscitation him” said Ed. “Okay” Mark said as he gulped, Mark slowly lowered his lips down to Paul’s and blew, he did this at least fifty times but there was no answer from Paul until he regained conscious.

A few minutes later Ed said “I think we should go to the hospital with Paul and seeing as you’re the oldest Mark you should drive the caravan” “I agree” said Phillip “That’s fine with me” said Mark. The three boys carried Paul to the caravan along with their goggles, library book, tennis ball and towel. In the caravan Mark sat in the drivers seat and started the caravan up “EVERYONE READY?” shouted Mark “YES, YES” replied Ed & Phillip “ok here I go” Mark said to himself quietly. About an hour later Ed, Phillip & Mark got to the hospital with Mark carrying Paul, Ed went to the receptionist and said “that they had their dad unconscious dad with them” “Ok we will have a doctor as quickly as we can” said the receptionist “Thank you” replied Ed. When Mark sat down he called his mum to her the news, Mark said to Phillip that his mum is on her way soon Ed came back with a doctor “Is this the man” said the doctor “Yes” replied Ed just as Mark’s mum burst in the door. Ed, Mark, Phillip and Mark’ mum sat for thirty minutes on wooden bench reading old magazines until Paul came looking like he wanted to go on another adventure.